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I blame Daegaer's Good Omens: Deadly Sins series for this. [link] Because when I have seven characters in a band, it really calls for something like this. Especially because so far I've only mentioned them once in a finished story (Beyond [link]) and they've been mostly just lurking in my head.
I chose the cardinal and theological virtues over those that stand in opposition to the deadly sins, though. It makes more sense this way. (And no, I don't know much about the issue. I looked it up on Wikipedia and used my common/own personal sense as to the application of the virtues.)
Also, there's quite a lot of Rick in it. That's because he was the last one to join the band and it was him who (unintentionally) gave the impulse to its name; and I rather like looking at the others through his eyes. Which sounds bad, considering the circumstances, but his blindness was only temporary; he underwent an operation and at the point of the conversation in "Courage", he already sees again.
There might be more to be said of the way Yaron recruited Rick for the band, but I made a point of making each of the issues exactly one Word page long and it says enough about Yaron's charity as it is.
I don't use swearwords either, but I do very occasionally write them down when a character does. There are two (EDIT: Um, actually more. I can't count.) swearwords in this and both of them were put into it because they make sense where they are. Therefore this thing has mature content warning attached to it, but I really hope it's not offensive at all.
I chose the cardinal and theological virtues over those that stand in opposition to the deadly sins, though. It makes more sense this way. (And no, I don't know much about the issue. I looked it up on Wikipedia and used my common/own personal sense as to the application of the virtues.)
Also, there's quite a lot of Rick in it. That's because he was the last one to join the band and it was him who (unintentionally) gave the impulse to its name; and I rather like looking at the others through his eyes. Which sounds bad, considering the circumstances, but his blindness was only temporary; he underwent an operation and at the point of the conversation in "Courage", he already sees again.
There might be more to be said of the way Yaron recruited Rick for the band, but I made a point of making each of the issues exactly one Word page long and it says enough about Yaron's charity as it is.
I don't use swearwords either, but I do very occasionally write them down when a character does. There are two (EDIT: Um, actually more. I can't count.) swearwords in this and both of them were put into it because they make sense where they are. Therefore this thing has mature content warning attached to it, but I really hope it's not offensive at all.
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I like these vignettes, although I didn't see the seven virtues connection; partially because they're not as frequently seen, so I just didn't think to look for it. As an exercise, though, it's fine if the connection isn't totally obvious (even if it made the emphasis on the Christian aspect of their music seem a little out of left field, which might also come from the fact that I don't have a Christian background).
It's true, some of them are stronger than others. Personally, I found the Courage one to be the weakest, from the sense of giving insight into Shin's personality without explicitly describing his feelings. (Not that any of them are genuinely bad.) My favorites were Faith and Temperance (probably Temperance a little more); the conversation seems oblique, but says a lot about all of the characters involved.
As for the overall language, you've struck a great balance between dialogue and description for the most part--there is some overuse of the word 'very,' and, while I'm not completely opposed to telling, 'Hope' has a few too many adjectives (the 'cats' song' starts off great, but the metaphors just seem to peter out).
From a more practical perspective, there's two ways to use these vignettes: one is to work them into a larger story. The other, to see this piece as its own complete work, would demand a little more explanation of the symbolism (and the titles). Out of curiosity, was the use of 'communion' for Aras and Rick's meal intentional? That kind of thing could show up more, and help hint at the context, as well as just being a clever way to get it across.
Hope this helps.
It's true, some of them are stronger than others. Personally, I found the Courage one to be the weakest, from the sense of giving insight into Shin's personality without explicitly describing his feelings. (Not that any of them are genuinely bad.) My favorites were Faith and Temperance (probably Temperance a little more); the conversation seems oblique, but says a lot about all of the characters involved.
As for the overall language, you've struck a great balance between dialogue and description for the most part--there is some overuse of the word 'very,' and, while I'm not completely opposed to telling, 'Hope' has a few too many adjectives (the 'cats' song' starts off great, but the metaphors just seem to peter out).
From a more practical perspective, there's two ways to use these vignettes: one is to work them into a larger story. The other, to see this piece as its own complete work, would demand a little more explanation of the symbolism (and the titles). Out of curiosity, was the use of 'communion' for Aras and Rick's meal intentional? That kind of thing could show up more, and help hint at the context, as well as just being a clever way to get it across.
Hope this helps.